2011年3月10日

A Dream I Have Had

There was a mission bell; I didn't know neither where I was nor that I was dreaming due to the darkness.  I gradually saw the light appearing, and I was at my junior high school with nobody there.  "What's going on?"  I wondered.  It was already over nine o'clock in the morning but there was no one here.  I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation.  Fortunately, I saw my best friend coming to me with her hands shaking and greeting me.  Then, a shadow rapidly passed through like the wind, and we perceived somebody peeping at us.  All of a sudden, a bloody beast appeared with its stale smell disgusting me, and a shimmering light could be found on its forehead.  At the very moment, the frightening monster rushed to my friend and tore her into pieces; I was very dreaded at the scarlet scene.  Yet, I told to myself that I had to live; afterward, I accidently became an exorcist and defeated it.  After the tough fight, I won, but I looked at my best friend's cell phone which was lying on the ground in desperation.  Unconsciously, my head grew heavy and my sight grew dimmer, before long, I woke up finding myself lying in bed with my body covered with beads of sweat.  I knew I had just a nightmare dream, but I seemed to sniff a slight smell of blood.

7 則留言:

  1. 第五句I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation. little跟bit應該用其中一個就可以了吧?

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  2. Yet, I told to myself that I had to live;
    我覺得"told to myself"的"to"可以弄不見吔。

    欠揍的感想剛剛已經告訴妳了,所以在此不續言。
    目前就這樣★

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  3. I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation.
    little 和 bit是不是選其中一個就好阿?
    I was very dreaded at the scarlet scene
    dreaded應該是形容詞dread吧

    希望我沒有說錯 :D

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  4. 第二行的dreaming 是否要加 about ?

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  5. I was very dreaded at the scarlet scene
    dread是動詞喔!
    這裡應該是放形容詞dreadful

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  6. Unconsciously, my head grew heavy and my sight grew dimmer, before long,~sweat.
    這句可以在dimmer和befer中間分成兩句
    I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation.
    裡的little與bit可以擇一

    以上~
    我盡力了!
    妳的夢很刺激喔!
    =目

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  7. There was a mission bell.
    這一句我看不懂= =
    你的文章好像在寫小說
    恐怖的一個夢...
    I knew I had just a nightmare dream, but I seemed to sniff a slight smell of blood.

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