There was a mission bell; I didn't know neither where I was nor that I was dreaming due to the darkness. I gradually saw the light appearing, and I was at my junior high school with nobody there. "What's going on?" I wondered. It was already over nine o'clock in the morning but there was no one here. I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation. Fortunately, I saw my best friend coming to me with her hands shaking and greeting me. Then, a shadow rapidly passed through like the wind, and we perceived somebody peeping at us. All of a sudden, a bloody beast appeared with its stale smell disgusting me, and a shimmering light could be found on its forehead. At the very moment, the frightening monster rushed to my friend and tore her into pieces; I was very dreaded at the scarlet scene. Yet, I told to myself that I had to live; afterward, I accidently became an exorcist and defeated it. After the tough fight, I won, but I looked at my best friend's cell phone which was lying on the ground in desperation. Unconsciously, my head grew heavy and my sight grew dimmer, before long, I woke up finding myself lying in bed with my body covered with beads of sweat. I knew I had just a nightmare dream, but I seemed to sniff a slight smell of blood.
第五句I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation. little跟bit應該用其中一個就可以了吧?
回覆刪除Yet, I told to myself that I had to live;
回覆刪除我覺得"told to myself"的"to"可以弄不見吔。
欠揍的感想剛剛已經告訴妳了,所以在此不續言。
目前就這樣★
I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation.
回覆刪除little 和 bit是不是選其中一個就好阿?
I was very dreaded at the scarlet scene
dreaded應該是形容詞dread吧
希望我沒有說錯 :D
第二行的dreaming 是否要加 about ?
回覆刪除I was very dreaded at the scarlet scene
回覆刪除dread是動詞喔!
這裡應該是放形容詞dreadful
Unconsciously, my head grew heavy and my sight grew dimmer, before long,~sweat.
回覆刪除這句可以在dimmer和befer中間分成兩句
I felt a little bit startled for the creepy situation.
裡的little與bit可以擇一
以上~
我盡力了!
妳的夢很刺激喔!
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There was a mission bell.
回覆刪除這一句我看不懂= =
你的文章好像在寫小說
恐怖的一個夢...
I knew I had just a nightmare dream, but I seemed to sniff a slight smell of blood.