2011年3月14日

A Good Memory That Will Last Forever

On a Saturday morning, a genial sunbeam brightened my hair as well as my black patent leather bag to vividness; I thought it would certainly be a nice day for me.  As I was rambling around the railway station to wait for my cousin, I met an old lady, whose hair was a little messy, peddled tissue paper alone the street in a hoarse voice.  However, plenty of people passed by the granny, but no one intended to stop.  I watched all the comings and goings.  Afterward, I stayed beside her; she looked at me appreciatively.  After a few talks, I knew that she had lived alone for several years, and she had to support herself even though the painstaking livelihood had tortured her for long.  Hence, I decided to buy all the tissue paper her sold, and wanted her to return home for a rest.  To my surprise, she smiled broadly at me, and she said that I was such a nice person who was willing to help an old lady.  On seeing her satisfaction expressed on her face, I was infatuated in the sparkling smile.  At that moment, I realized the essence of unforgettable memory lies in achieving the real happiness of the inner life.

10 則留言:

  1. 我覺得結論句寫的還不錯~~
    我覺得可以多描述幫助人後的心情的是如何
    然後為什麼會讓你這麼印象深刻!!!!!

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  2. I met an old lady, whose hair was a little messy, peddled tissue paper alone the street in a hoarse voice. 這邊alone應該是along然後peddled是不是應該用ing形式?
    I realized the essence of unforgettable memory lies in achieving the real happiness of the inner life.=>lies應該改為過去是
    結論句寫的不錯~

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  3. 哇哇冠伶的單字都用得好"advanced"喔XD
    單字都要慢慢查吶~~

    冠伶真是個好人~~

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  4. To 品婷:
    whose hair was a little messy是關代,我想用來修飾lady,所以中間這段是可以省略的,至於peddle我用過去式是因為前面有,…我的想法是如果要用peddling,應該要把前面的,去掉…關於其他的意見及更正,很謝謝哦。
    To 其他人:
    感謝妳們的意見以及感想哦。

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  5. --對不起。
    --我真的不會改了。
    -->"<

    喜歡結論句。すきです。

    --全買啊,
    妳好有錢哦,真的。

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  6. To 妤如:(題外話)
    才不是有錢,因為她賣的都很便宜…

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  7. 寫得好棒喔!
    挑不出毛病~

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  8. 好像在看小說阿o_o
    我都買口香糖拉:D
    冠伶的文章句法都好優美
    單字還要看很久..太精深了
    是說,謝謝冠伶這麼如此用心的看我的文章
    幫我改了好多地方^_^고마워

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